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Buccaneer Blog Fest 2nd Week: Day One

Hello lovely Readers! Sorry this is so late in posting. I've had a personal crisis in my family and I had to deal with some pretty emotional things. It's going to be a long week...

Now, today for the blog fest we are to post the first paragraph of our current in progress. This is my newest endeavor and a totally new concept for me. I posted the first five chapters first line in the Hookers and Hangers Blog Hop below. Here, you get the first paragraph.

I don't have a title yet and there are only five chapters, but it's a start! I would love your comments! So go ahead and tell me what you think. Be honest!

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     Forget who I am for just one minute and put your feet in my shoes. Although I am a member of the Guardian Elite, I am also a person. A person with feelings that hurt, rejoice and gets scared just like you. Sure, I have other feelings in my heart but these are the ones I'm dealing with right now so it makes it easier for me to talk about them. Lots of my friends say they wish they could walk a mile in my shoes. But let me tell you a little secret. My shoes are too big for me. I have blisters. And my athletes foot is acting up again. Take it from me. You don't want my shoes on your feet right now.

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And there you go. The first paragraph of my most recent project. You've met my MC in the CQ Carnival. She's running the ticket booth. Her name is Sailor.

Comments

  1. What a great first line. I was definitely hooked. :)Sounds like you are on your way!

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  2. Hehe, I like it! I already love Sailor's voice! :D Nice work.

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  3. I love it!! I'll have to do a special post tonight!! So let me get this straight, it has to be the first paragraph from one of my recent projects? Right? Does it matter if it's not published or anything?

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  4. She sounds like a cool character.

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  5. Ooh intriguing, wonder what the MC is dealing with!

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  6. I like the Guardian Elite. Sounds cool. :)

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  7. huh, it's cool, I like the change to literal shoes. it takes the allegory and turns it a bit on it's head.

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