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Blog Hop: HANGERS!!

For today's endings, I have the first five last lines of each chapter. Sad to say, with my computer still MIA I haven't been able to do any writing. I miss MY MacBook! I did get a  new, gorgeous baby that started out as a loan while mine was being repaired. But we have decided to keep it. It is super nice, but ALL my *stuff* is on my old computer and I miss my *stuff*. IF that even makes sense...

Are you ready for my hangers? I hope you like them:)

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Chapter 1: For all it's worth I am so in trouble.

Chapter 2: Not only is it pouring down rain, it is pitch dark and  I have no idea where I am.

Chapter 3: Before I had a chance to explain, total mayhem flew through the door.

Chapter 4: Sure he's smart and funny and absolutely gorgeous but that doesn't matter because he can never be mine.

Chapter 5: Vanity waltzed into the room decked out like she was going to the ball.

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That's it for now. All I need now is your comments! Thanks so much for taking the time to read my hookers and hangers this week!

Comments

  1. ClareJuly 18, 2012 at 4:56 AM

    Excellent hangers, I really liked them all, and they're certain to have me turning the page.

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    1. Ink in the BookJuly 18, 2012 at 2:32 PM

      Thanks Clare! I really wasn't for sure if they would pass the test or not:)

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  2. Emily R. KingJuly 18, 2012 at 11:25 AM

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  3. Emily R. KingJuly 18, 2012 at 11:26 AM

    I'm sorry your computer is MIA. :(

    BUT, I really like your hangers! All of them are excellent.

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    1. Ink in the BookJuly 18, 2012 at 2:45 PM

      Thanks, Emily. Yeah, my computer is missed. But when I finally get it back, it will be better because it will be fixed. My optical drive needed work...

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  4. Lynn(e) SchmidtJuly 18, 2012 at 12:24 PM

    I also am sorry about the missing computer! I'd be so lost without mine (though thankfully my phone has blog and twitter apps!)

    I loved your hookers! Especially 1, 2, and 4! Awesome job.

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    1. Ink in the BookJuly 18, 2012 at 2:46 PM

      Sure! What would we do without our phones??
      And thanks for stopping by and commenting!

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  5. Nancy ThompsonJuly 18, 2012 at 12:58 PM

    I like chapter 4 the best!

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    1. Ink in the BookJuly 18, 2012 at 6:26 PM

      In all reality, #4 is my favorite too. It is bittersweet in the end.

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  6. 1000th.monkeyJuly 18, 2012 at 1:21 PM

    I really love the voice in these, especially #4.

    My MacBookPro died on me a few months ago... so I feel your pain :( Luckily I have the desktop, but all my *stuff* is on a backup hard drive in a drawer until I get a new laptop of my own... was HOPING the new 13" would have the awesome new screens... but alas, only the 15" were released :(

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    1. Ink in the BookJuly 18, 2012 at 6:28 PM

      It;s problem? The optical drive needs replacing thanks to falling off the desk. *closes eyes and shakes head, red cheeks flaming*

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  7. AmberJuly 18, 2012 at 1:39 PM

    Oh I love 3, and 4!

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  8. Hope RobersonJuly 18, 2012 at 2:02 PM

    These are FABULOUS! WOW! It'd be impossible to put this down! Nicely done!

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    1. Ink in the BookJuly 19, 2012 at 12:28 AM

      Thank you Hope! I sure didn't expect fabulous, but I'm so glad you think so!

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  9. VikLitJuly 18, 2012 at 4:32 PM

    I really like all of these, but no 3 is particularly attention grabbing and well worded!

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    1. Ink in the BookJuly 19, 2012 at 12:30 AM

      Oh yeah! This chapter leads up to some exciting stuff and I'm glad you liked the ending because the next chapter digs into some action:)

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  10. Jenny S. MorrisJuly 18, 2012 at 5:27 PM

    3 & 5 have it!!Love these. Such a great picture of the story. Thanks for participating!!

    Sorry to hear about your stuff! I would go crazy. Hope you get it back soon.

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    1. Ink in the BookJuly 19, 2012 at 12:31 AM

      Thanks a trillion Jenny! Yes, I am lost without all me goodies:( Hope your vacation was awesome~

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  11. RobinJuly 18, 2012 at 5:55 PM

    I really liked the last one. Especially if Vanity is not the person's real name... then I REALLY liked it. I am assuming it isn't... who names their kid Vanity? Anyway, it's just snarky enough to make me want to turn the page because you know SOMETHING is going to happen.

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    1. Ink in the BookJuly 19, 2012 at 12:32 AM

      Vanity is a nickname and I'm sure you can guess why the gang calls her that! I'm glad you liked it!

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  12. Krista McLaughlinJuly 18, 2012 at 8:28 PM

    I love the first one! :)

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    1. Ink in the BookJuly 19, 2012 at 12:33 AM

      Thanks Krista! Believe it or not, I changed that line like 5 times before I settled on this one>

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  13. TrishaJuly 18, 2012 at 9:32 PM

    Yep, my fave is the first line :) It rocks!

    oh, and once you've posted your hangers can you let me know, otherwise I may forget which blogs haven't posted theirs yet & never get to see them!

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    1. Ink in the BookJuly 19, 2012 at 12:33 AM

      Thanks Trisha. I've posted and visited yours! Great work, btw:)

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  14. Amanda OlivieriJuly 19, 2012 at 12:04 AM

    Wow, I really love all of these. Especially 1 and 4! Awesome!

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  15. Emily GentherJuly 19, 2012 at 2:10 PM

    I love that last one!

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    1. Ink in the BookJuly 19, 2012 at 3:20 PM

      Thanks! And thanks for coming over and visiting Ink in the Book!

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  16. Nick WilfordJuly 19, 2012 at 2:15 PM

    I like 'em! Fun voice. I like 3 and 5 the best.

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  17. Mark MurataJuly 19, 2012 at 4:38 PM

    Very fun ending lines, especially with mayhem flying in and Vanity waltzing in. That's how to make the reader turn the page.

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  18. cleemckenzieJuly 19, 2012 at 4:48 PM

    These are great. #2 had me very nervous. I'd keep the light on and read the next page!

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    1. Ink in the BookJuly 19, 2012 at 10:52 PM

      Yep, she's nervous, too, but not for long. She soon figures it out, though she's not happy about it. Yet.

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  19. JeannetteJuly 19, 2012 at 6:09 PM

    I have to comment on the voice too - I already have an image of characters from these few lines. I like #5 the best.

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    1. Ink in the BookJuly 19, 2012 at 10:54 PM

      YAY!! Thanks Jeannette. That means I did my hanging, right? Thanks for stopping by and commenting!

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  20. sueJuly 19, 2012 at 10:38 PM

    I liked all of them but I did say "Awwww" at number 4

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    1. Ink in the BookJuly 19, 2012 at 10:55 PM

      Thank you Sue and thanks for visiting my blog. It's been a fun Blog hop, hasn't it?

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  21. Cassie MaeJuly 20, 2012 at 11:11 AM

    I'm such a sucker for the love stories, so number 4 was my fav! Thanks so much for participating in the hop! :D

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  22. Kelley LynnJuly 20, 2012 at 5:28 PM

    I'm kinda hopin' she's wrong in #4 ;)

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  23. EM CastellanJuly 22, 2012 at 4:53 PM

    I love #1 & 2, excellent! Thanks for stopping by my blog!

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