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Blog Hop: Hookers and Hangers

I know. It sounds like... well it's not! It's all about first lines of your manuscripts and WIP. And it's a contest from over at Falling For Fiction, one of my new favorite places to hang out!

What you do is post the first line of a chapter, or many chapters, from your current story and theres's going to be about 10 winners who will receive a critique. And let me tell you! These ladies do amazing critiques! So without any more nonsense, here's my first lines from my current WIP (Really, I have about 5 WIP, but this is my most recent!)

Chapter one: Forget who I am for just one minute and put your feet in my shoes.

Chapter two: Don't get me wrong, 'cause Star is a great friend but not so much a leader.

Chapter three: In all reality, this place is not totally bad with a capital B.

Chapter four: Without warning the chair flew out from under him.

Chapter five: The dock smelled of stinky fish and the conversation buzzed around the latest invention:  the telegraph.

Well that's my current WIP!! Thanks for reading my great hookers.

Comments

  1. AmberJuly 16, 2012 at 11:00 AM

    Hey girl, these are great. And I love the name Star by the way :) You pick the best names!

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  2. Hope RobersonJuly 16, 2012 at 11:04 AM

    Nicely done! Excellent way to start off a book with hooker #1, perfect!

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  3. Alex J. CavanaughJuly 16, 2012 at 11:09 AM

    Sounds like a young adult book. Am I right?

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  4. AnonymousJuly 16, 2012 at 11:56 AM

    Great job. Seems like many are forgoing their Buccaneer's post today to do this instead, but still great fun:-)

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  5. Elizabeth SeckmanJuly 16, 2012 at 12:01 PM

    I vote #1. It is not only a good hook, but it makes me feel sympathy for the character before I meet her.

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  6. Jenny S. MorrisJuly 16, 2012 at 12:54 PM

    I agree with everyone else. I think #1 is great! Can't wait to read your hangers.

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  7. Kimberly GabrielJuly 16, 2012 at 2:24 PM

    I love, love, love the first one! Especially as the start of your MS! Well done!

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  8. EM CastellanJuly 16, 2012 at 3:51 PM

    Wow, you're WIP sounds interesting and I love the first line from Chapter 1, great hook!

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  9. VikLitJuly 16, 2012 at 5:12 PM

    Esp like no 1!

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  10. Kelley LynnJuly 16, 2012 at 5:19 PM

    My gosh do you know how to flatter! Thanks my dear :)

    And I too am in love with #1. So well written! Great hookers!

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  11. Rachel SchieffelbeinJuly 16, 2012 at 6:23 PM

    Nicely done! I feel like you really get a sense of your voice with just these few lines. :)

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  12. A.J. LockeJuly 16, 2012 at 8:23 PM

    Great lines, I already get a sense of the story!

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  13. Lisa ReganJuly 16, 2012 at 9:08 PM

    These are great! I like #1 the best! Thanks for stopping by my blog!

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  14. Krista McLaughlinJuly 16, 2012 at 9:41 PM

    Good hooks! I like the first one. :)

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  15. Nick WilfordJuly 17, 2012 at 1:44 AM

    I like these! You have a very nice voice. I think the first one is great too!

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  16. 1000th.monkeyJuly 17, 2012 at 6:12 PM

    The first line intrigues me, mostly 'cause I'm not sure how I can put myself in someone's shoes if I forget who they are first ;)

    The last one was interesting too, giving a nice hint of setting.

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