Hey beautiful guys and dolls! Here it is! My CP feedback edited story. Had a hard time with this, but I hope it makes sense. I've got a post I'm working on I plan to put up after Thanksgiving. Here ya go. Enjoy... Every morning I wake to carnival day. Today, though, I have my key. If I don’t use it before midnight, my way of escape will gone. It’s a silver key with a twisted metal handle, a sapphire stone half moon and engraved stars. There’s a tiny inscription on the moon, but it’s so small, I’ve never been able to read it.I’ve always kept mine in my jewelry box, but today, I string it on a ribbon and tie it around my neck. My two best friends will be wearing theirs, too, and I wonder how they will escape this carnival of dreams. “What’s it for?” Cress asks as we stand in line for the swings. I run my fingertips over the entire silver surface. “I don’t know. It belonged to my grandmother,” I say. “Whatever.” She shrugs her shoulder in a dismissive way. “Have
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ReplyDeleteOne chapter at a time! Congratulations.
ReplyDeleteEach small step adds to the giant leap. Well done and keep writing!
ReplyDeleteI would definitely be celebrating a polished first chapter. Like Laura said, it's a step in the right direction.
ReplyDeleteGetting the first chapter just right is hard (and worrying) so well done and best of luck with the rest.
ReplyDeleteA polished first chapter - that's great :)
ReplyDeleteYay on a chapter one!! To me, they're the hardest.
ReplyDeleteThe first sentence, the first page, the first chapter - Excellent achievement.
ReplyDeleteFor me it's always the fist sentence. Bet things move on quickly from here! Celebrating with you!
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Congratulations! Keep at it and you'll get it done, all of the chapters. :D
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ReplyDeleteYay for your shiny first chapter. I don't think I'd have the patience to work on one chapter at a time. I have to get everything down on paper before I can even think about editing.
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